translation: update heap index translation #1620
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| Among these peaks, the highest one always catches the eye first. | ||
| The peaks are arranged at various heights, but the highest peak always catches the eye first. |
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Hi Thomas
I felt like the original version may be better with a slight tune:
"Heaps are like towering mountain peaks, stacked and undulating, each with its own unique shape.
Among these peaks, the tallest one always captures attention first."
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yes the refined version is good, however I felt like it kinda break the imagery a bit, for example "山峰" (peak) suggest unique shape and height, which aligns with the metaphor of heaps (where heap is distinct part of the structure).
"mountain ranges" may change the metaphor slightly. Mountain ranges suggest a collective form rather than distinct peaks, diminishing the emphasis on individuality. The CN version is quite visual and poetic, this change may make it more neutral and less vivid.
(also rather changing "the eye first." -> "captures attention first." is OPTIONAL)
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Thanks @K3v123 for your detailed suggestions. I've adopted some of your suggestions.
- add "their jagged peaks" to include the peaks.
- I prefer using "form" over "shape" as the former is three-dimensional.
- "Among these peaks" misses some details from its Chinese version "座座山峰高低错落", hence I replace it with a complete sentence to reflect the meaning.
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| The heap is like mountain peaks, stacked and undulating, each with its unique shape. | |||
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"is like" => "resemble", and "stacked" => "layered".
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It appears to me that you were commenting on original translation instead of PR changes. Can you please review the new commit? IMO, "resemble" may not be accurate as it suggests similarity on appearance rather than internal qualities.
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Hi, I commented directly on the original version because of the previous comment "I felt like the original version may be better with a slight tune".
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It appears to me that you were commenting on original translation instead of PR changes. Can you please review the new commit? IMO, "resemble" may not be accurate as it suggests similarity on appearance rather than internal qualities.
Hi, Thomas. I still insist on "resemble", as it refers to both physical appearance and inherent characteristics, and it's more formal than "be like".
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| Among these peaks, the highest one always catches the eye first. |
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- "高低错落" has not been shown in the translation. Maybe it could be translated into "rise and fall in a staggered arrangement"
- Ich denke, this context is about progressive explanation, not contrast. So "and" is more suitable than "but".
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updated. thanks for your comment.
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