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-                            <h2 class="text-center">What makes Sugar different?</h2>
+                            <h2 class="text-center">What makes Sugar different?</h2><!--It would be nice to define what we are talking about when we say "Sugar", since we have multiple platforms. For example, is this page dedicated to Sugar as desktop environment, or do we want to make this broader to include web apps, Sugarizer, etc.-->
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-                                <li  class="listFont" >Sugar facilitates sharing and collaboration: Children can write,
+                                <li  class="listFont" >Sugar facilitates sharing and collaboration: children can write articles,
                                 share books, or make music together with a single mouse-click.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Activities, not applications: Sugar activities are applicable
                                 beyond the scope of the classroom and even Sugar itself.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Automatic backup of Activity work; no worrying about files or
                                 folders. Sugar’s Journal makes it almost impossible to lose any
                                 data.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">The Journal records everything you do: It is a place to reflect
+                                <li class="listFont">The Journal records everything you do: it is a place to reflect
                                 upon and evaluate your work.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Sugar runs on most computer hardware, including slower machines.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Sugar is Free (Libre) Software: It is written in the Python
+                                <li class="listFont">Sugar is Free (Libre) Software: it is written in the Python
                                 language and easily customized.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Sugar is documented by its users: It is easy to use and teachers
+                                <li class="listFont">Sugar is documented by its users: it is easy to use, and teachers
                                 worldwide have created a wealth of pedagogical materials for it.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Sugar is written by its users: 50% of the updates to our latest
-                                release came directly from our users.</li>
+                                release came directly from our users.</li><!--It would be nice to have a link here, for reference. -->
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@@ -47,20 +47,20 @@ <h2 class="text-center">What are the benefits of using Sugar?</h2>
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                                 <li class="listFont">Hundreds of tools for discovery through exploring, expressing, and
-                                sharing: browsing, writing, etc.</li>
+                                sharing through online research, writing, coding, and more.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Built-in collaboration system: peer-to-peer learning; always-on
-                                support; and single-click sharing.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">The Journal is a built-in portfolio assessment tool that serves as
+                                support; and single-click sharing.</li><!-- What is "always-on support"?-->
+                                <li class="listFont">A built-in portfolio assessment tool called Journal that serves as
                                 a forum for discussion between children, parents, and teachers.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">A discoverable learning platform: it uses simple means to reach to
-                                complex ends.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Designed for local appropriation: it has built-in tools for making
-                                changes and improvements and a growing global community of support. 25
+                                complex ends.</li><!--What do we mean by "discoverable"? That we can use the platform to discover ideas? I don't think we mean "easy to find", but it's perhaps not totally obvious.-->
+                                <li class="listFont">Designed for local appropriation: Sugar has built-in tools for making
+                                changes and improvements and a growing global community of support. twenty-five
                                 languages are currently available.</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">An emphasis on learning through doing and debugging: more engaged
-                                learners are able to tackle authentic problems.</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">An emphasis on <em>learning through doing</em> and debugging: this engages
+                                learners better to tackle authentic problems.</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Available in a wide variety of forms: as part of GNU/Linux
-                                distributions; LiveCD, LiveUSB; and in a virtual machine.</li>
+                                distributions, as well as LiveCD, LiveUSB, and in a virtual machine for Windows and Mac machines.</li>
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@@ -71,14 +71,16 @@ <h2 class="text-center">What are the benefits of using Sugar?</h2>
                             <h2 class="text-center">What are the Sugar advantages?</h2>
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-                                <li class="listFont">Superior pedagogical framework</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Unique collaboration and journaling (evaluation) features</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Large & successful installed base with hundreds of activities</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Large and committed community base (both developers and teachers)</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">24/7 community support; training and workshop materials available</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Rapidly expanding teacher-driven development</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">Pedagogical framework centered around Constructionism learning and founded on student empowerment</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">Collaboration and journaling features, uniquely designed by educators for educators and learners</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">Hundreds of activities</li><!--I didn't understand what we meant by "Large & successful installed base" so I removed it for now-->
+                                <li class="listFont">Large and committed community of developers, teachers, and learners from all around the globe</li><!--Perhaps it would be nice to have numbers here, if possible-->
+                                <li class="listFont">24/7 community support</li><!--What do we mean by this? That we are available by Matrix/IRC?-->
+				<li class="listFont">Online and in-person training and workshops available</li>
+				<li class="listFont">Handouts available to use in the classroom</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">Teacher-driven development, rapidly expanding every day</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">Easily localizable and customizable</li>
-                                <li class="listFont">Free/libre software: no licensing fees</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">Free/Libre software: no licensing fees</li>
                                 <li class="listFont">A global project: no single point of dependency or failure</li>
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-                            <h2 class="text-center">A “learning-centric” approach</h2>
+                            <h2 class="text-center">A <em>learning-centric</em> approach</h2>
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-                                <li class="listFont">At Sugar Labs, we strive for a “learning-centric” approach, where teachers mentor students as they engage with powerful ideas, “teaching less and learning more.” While we want to give children access to knowledge—through media such as electronic books, the world-wide web, and multimedia—we also want them to acquire this knowledge by putting it to use and engaging in critical dialog. With Sugar, we help learners acquire knowledge by giving them tools that make them consumers, critics, and creators of knowledge; Sugar welcomes them as members of a learning community. Cross-community collaboration between technologists and teachers ensures that the ideals of freedom, sharing, open critique, and transparency will be part of the interface to learning that touches children in the world’s classrooms.</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">At Sugar Labs, we strive for a <i>learning-centric</i> approach, where teachers mentor students as they engage with powerful ideas, or <em>instructing less and learning more</em>. At Sugar Labs, we give children access to <i>knowledge</i>—through media such as electronic books, the world-wide web, and multimedia—but, more importantly, we give them the tools they need to <i>create</i>, to learn about learning, to put knowledge to use, and engage in reflection and critical dialog. With Sugar, we help learners <i>acquire knowledge</i> so that they grow as active consumers, critics, and <i>creators of knowledge</i>; Sugar welcomes them as members of a vibrant learning community. Plus, cross-community collaboration between technologists and teachers ensures that the ideals of student empowerment, freedom, sharing, open critique, and transparency will remain an integral part of Sugar—one that touches the lives of children and their communities all across the world’s classrooms.</li>
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@@ -101,7 +103,7 @@ <h2 class="text-center">A “learning-centric” approach</h2>
                             <h2 class="text-center">The Free (Libre) Software culture</h2>
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-                                <li class="listFont">The Sugar pedagogy is embodied in the culture of Free/Libre Software; teachers and students are empowered with both the freedom to act and the freedom to be critical. Criticism of ideas is a powerful force in learning and in fostering economic development; unleashing that is an important part of the mission.</li>
+                                <li class="listFont">The Sugar pedagogy is embodied in the culture of Free/Libre Software; teachers and students are empowered with both the freedom to actively participate and the freedom to be critical. Criticism of ideas is a powerful force in learning, as well as in fostering economic development; unleashing this potential is an important part of our mission.</li>
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